I don't mind the music much. It was meh... But I really didn't like the visuals. I don't really know enough about camera work to put a finger on it, but the editing seemed lackluster and the footage was soooo bright. Seems like it could have used some kind of shading and some slo-mo for dramatic effect at key moments during the song.
I try to offer constructive criticism if at all possible. I see you grinding, trying to come up man! I liked this video, but again, some slo-mo shots would have been dope here:
I think this video has some good styling tips to draw from: