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Baka Sama
06-01-2007, 12:04 AM
So I'm in the process of creating a new "series" for fun. Im still in the developing phase so tell me what you guys think so far. Keep in mind I want this to be an comedy manga, with adult humor. lol

Main character lives on an island in the pacific ocean. He lives with parents and helps run a shop on the shore strip. (He lives on top of the shop) Main character loves to surf and competes with his college team whenever he can. His goal is to someday become world famous. One day while practicing on the other side of the island a mysterious storm wecks the island and destroys his home/shop. His parents are also lost in the storm, believed to be swept away by the tide. Everything he has is lost including his surfing dream. Or is it?! After burrying his parents and making arragements to leave the island to live with his granparents, he goes for a night swim to catch one last wave.

While paddling out, he runs in to Zach. Zach is his ach rivial in his college surfing world. Zach gives his condolences for the death of his parents, but sarcasticly mentions that the only reason hes leaving the island was that he knew he would not win the next surfing competition. Outraged the main character challenges Zach one last time. The battle goes on for hours until they both see the perfect wave forming. Both characters rush the wave and side by side they enter the spiral. The main character manages to cut Zach off and exit first. He laughs in triumph just to realize its no longer night time, but daylight! Not only that but his home island is no longer in view, just a small island in the distance. He and Zach look at each other and then up in the sky.... 2 suns??!

They paddle to the mysterious island and are greeted by a towns people clapping and cheering for them. A group of what seems to be strangly dressed guards esorts them to the king.

~This part is a little fuzzy, but what I got so far is that they are greeted by King Crab Legs. A funny old man that tells them they were transported there at his request through the wave they rode through. He then tells them the orgin of surfing. How in the begining, only royalty could practice this ancient form of combat. Combat???! Yes king crab legs tells them that every 100 years a surfing tournament is head in this land and only royalty is allowed to participate. Instead of fighting on land they battle in the sea, using thier boards to ride the waves. The main character and Zach have no interest in helping out king crab legs until he mentions that the winner of the tournament gets an unimaginable prize and the title of the greatest surfer in the galaxy. Pushed by thoughts of fame and glory they both agree to help! The king then explains the rules of the tournament and how each island in his world may pick a small group of up to 3 fighters to attend each match. Whichever island wins 2/3 of the battels moves on to fight in the next round.~

The king has only a teenage duaghter and he is too old to compete. The king then sends his busty daughter to stay with Zach and the main character back on earth to help them with all the rules of the tournament. (Main chracters love interest)

Long story short... the three go back to earth, reopen the main characters shop, and they all move in together. Working in the shop for money and competing in the tournament. As the story progresses more characters are introduced that help in the tournament and live with the main character...


So... What do you think so far?? opinions?? :D
If i anything is spelled wrong.. its late and im at work lol

Zero1er
06-01-2007, 12:46 AM
The plot is pretty good so far. It has potential for sure in terms of originality. I'm sure your finished product will be great. And +1 for the busty female love interest :bigok:

full house
06-01-2007, 06:39 AM
We are not a child anymore!


Anime are for children only!

Baka Sama
06-01-2007, 08:51 AM
We are not a child anymore!


Anime are for children only!

I have many hobbies and drawing manga is just one of them. I had a friend tell me modding cars is childish and to buy a sedan and grow up lol. Thats how you sound to me.

jrmiller84
06-01-2007, 09:07 AM
We are not a child anymore!


Anime are for children only!

Bad grammar is for children as well. And to your point, most good anime is DEFINITELY not for children but I'm not going to destroy the topic with bickering.


I would recommend going to places like fanfiction.net (http://www.fanfiction.net). My fiance is an avid poster there and that's the whole premise of the site, writing stories and getting reviews. If it can survive there, then it may be good enough to take to the next tier of development.

ManoNegra
06-01-2007, 09:19 AM
Do they battle Galactus in the end?
jk

I like the idea of a Surfing themed anime but don't really care for the sci-fi/fantasy/mystical elements. Too cliched imo but then again I'm jaded and much older than most typical anime fans.
I would preferr to see a more 'realistic style' story ala Touch, Prince of Tennis, Hakuro No Go or Yawara. A teen drama with a surfing background.
But props for doing what you like. Keep us posted on the development.

speedstar01
06-01-2007, 12:07 PM
definately has potential and im sure your tale will be more interesting with drawings. do you think you can post a few sketches up? keep working hard and keep at it :)

arkive43
06-01-2007, 12:44 PM
nice story id love to draw the busty love interest hahahah!

alexkosheck
06-01-2007, 01:41 PM
I dunno man...

I'm being honest, but it seems like

Spongebob Squarepants xx that new surfing movie with penguins

Baka Sama
06-01-2007, 02:08 PM
Thanks for all the opinions. I dont have any sketches yet but I might do some this weekend if I have time. Does anyone have good ideas for names?

Zach - Tall and tanned, well built, short blonde hair, and a tribal tattoo on shoulder. I want him to favor somthing like onizuka, but of course I have my own style of drawing.

http://www.kouaa-blog.com/resserver.php?blogId=257&resource=995.jpg

The princess - Blue hair, "developed", big eyes, pale skin
http://www.playmagazine.com/pictures/23f971d8bff9179727af18e80b4b4da4.jpg

Baka Sama
06-01-2007, 02:13 PM
I dunno man...

I'm being honest, but it seems like

Spongebob Squarepants xx that new surfing movie with penguins

Spongebob XXX! Its a simple concept I know, but i want it that way. That way I can focus more on the adult humor and above all else, making it fun to read.

aznpoopy
06-01-2007, 02:14 PM
i see the makings of a good anime. it sounds alot like a ryoko takahashi anime along the lines of ranma or that one thats on cartoon network now (forgot the name)

sun and beach = lots of boobs and bikinis

many anime take something non-combative and make it combative. this creates interesting fight sequences with all kinds of kooky techniques and strategies available as plot devices. "combat surfing" definitely works.

you just need to add the harem plot device. there are not enough girls. the main character must somehow attract the attention of at least 6 girls, despite the fact that he's a blustering idiot and probably a virgin. the girls all fall into one of the following archetypes, which are sometimes mixed: hot slut, dork/nerd, bimbo, virgin/pure/pretty, sporty, martial artist, crazy/aggressive.

also, i think zach is a weird choice for a name.

Baka Sama
06-01-2007, 02:19 PM
many anime take something non-combative and make it combative. this creates interesting fight sequences with all kinds of kooky techniques and strategies available as plot devices. "combat surfing" definitely works.


Bingo!

Oh and trust me, there will be girls! :naughty: